I WISH YOU COULD SEE MY SMILE. I REALLY DO. IT IS LIKE THIS:
I LOVE YOU AND I AM SO GLAD THAT YOU LIKED THIS. Honestly it's the one that stressed me out the most, of my recent stories, and I WAS WORRIED MAYBE I WOULD LET YOU DOWN IDK. I'm glad I didn't and thaaaaaank you for the comment, seriously grinning like a maniac.
I won't go through every single thing you said, but, typical teenage boy-esque Skandar was especially easy to write with Ben for some reason, that characterisation seemed to work, I'm glad you liked it in general and it didn't seem to jump about too much. And Ben's characterisation too - I actually think he and Skandar are my two favourite POVs to write from, so idk why this was so hard. Maybe the combination of the two. But yes WRITING BEN IS FUN I'm glad you like my Ben(s)?
The image of the condensation on Ben's beard made me go a bit flaily too, I'm not sure why either.
Michael turning up like LOOK A MEDICAL PROFESSIONAL, CEASE YOUR INEXPERT MEDICINE/SEXUAL ADVANCES SKANDAR KEYNES HAHAHAHA for real this bit made me BURST OUT LAUGHING and then I was worried I would wake my Dad up so I was like *choked giggle* for a minute or two. I should have had that be Michael's ACTUAL LINE, it would have been awesome.
Georgie had such a brief part in this (and there was no Will P. AT ALL, SORRY WILL P.) but I wanted to get across the sort of casual easiness of her care for him in contrast to Ben not knowing what to do, and how she was sort of being like an anxious sister all protective, idk. And how Skandar was totally all "sweary sweary grouch grouch STOP TOUCHING ME" with her but he wouldn't be like that with Ben.
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I LOVE YOU AND I AM SO GLAD THAT YOU LIKED THIS. Honestly it's the one that stressed me out the most, of my recent stories, and I WAS WORRIED MAYBE I WOULD LET YOU DOWN IDK. I'm glad I didn't and thaaaaaank you for the comment, seriously grinning like a maniac.
I won't go through every single thing you said, but, typical teenage boy-esque Skandar was especially easy to write with Ben for some reason, that characterisation seemed to work, I'm glad you liked it in general and it didn't seem to jump about too much. And Ben's characterisation too - I actually think he and Skandar are my two favourite POVs to write from, so idk why this was so hard. Maybe the combination of the two. But yes WRITING BEN IS FUN I'm glad you like my Ben(s)?
The image of the condensation on Ben's beard made me go a bit flaily too, I'm not sure why either.
Michael turning up like LOOK A MEDICAL PROFESSIONAL, CEASE YOUR INEXPERT MEDICINE/SEXUAL ADVANCES SKANDAR KEYNES
HAHAHAHA for real this bit made me BURST OUT LAUGHING and then I was worried I would wake my Dad up so I was like *choked giggle* for a minute or two. I should have had that be Michael's ACTUAL LINE, it would have been awesome.
Georgie had such a brief part in this (and there was no Will P. AT ALL, SORRY WILL P.) but I wanted to get across the sort of casual easiness of her care for him in contrast to Ben not knowing what to do, and how she was sort of being like an anxious sister all protective, idk. And how Skandar was totally all "sweary sweary grouch grouch STOP TOUCHING ME" with her but he wouldn't be like that with Ben.