This comment is so incredibly late! Fail! I've read it twice and meant to leave a comment straight after both times but just, well, didn't, obviously, so this is probably going to be a little vague on the details, but still. (It might make the tardiness of my comments a little easier to understand if I tell you that: 1) I tend to print out your stories so that I can read them wherever it's convenient, and 2) I read an awful lot in the bath. And well, baths and computers have a rather well-known dislike of each other :)).
So! First of all, I have a question! You rate this as 'Very hard R'. Oh my god! What would have to be in it for it to be NC-17? :D I mean, I know it's not super-explicit, but seriously the sheer heat of it puts it well up there with far more explicit things I've read (and obviously I mean that in the best possible way :)).
There's so much I love about this but I think, most of all, I love all that unspoken tension. At no point, as far as I recall, do they so much as hint at what's going on between them, it's all just left to stand, and yet there's so much there under the surface. Poor Skandar! He has it so bad, and yet he's just too - what?, shy?, intimidated?, immature?, clueless?, all of the above and more? - to know it, and he certainly can't talk about it. I really hope Tilda actually puts him out of this misery at some point and tells him, one way or the other, because that last paragraph is rather heart-breaking.
But before the last paragraph! Again, the uncertainty of it, the silence, Skandar's battle between anger and possessiveness - wanting to make Tilda come just to show that he can - and love and affection. And obviously, the image of this apparently utterly controlled woman just breaking under his tongue. Just hnnnng! Hot :p
You show the complexity of their relationship so well, too, well, how it is in Skandar's head, anyway. His boyish crush on her, his realisation that she probably only sees him as a child, and then the development of his feelings into other far more complicated things. Wonderful!
Oh, and the hilarious inadequacy of Skandar's excuse! You can just see the cogs in the woman at the door's mind going, making connections that she knows can't possibly be true (can they?), balanced only by the weakest excuse imaginable. Heee :) Let's hope she's not a gossip :D
As always, so much to enjoy here, and I just wish I could give it a comment that does it justice!
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Date: 2011-04-24 08:07 pm (UTC)I've read it twice and meant to leave a comment straight after both times but just, well, didn't, obviously, so this is probably going to be a little vague on the details, but still. (It might make the tardiness of my comments a little easier to understand if I tell you that: 1) I tend to print out your stories so that I can read them wherever it's convenient, and 2) I read an awful lot in the bath. And well, baths and computers have a rather well-known dislike of each other :)).
So!
First of all, I have a question! You rate this as 'Very hard R'. Oh my god! What would have to be in it for it to be NC-17? :D
I mean, I know it's not super-explicit, but seriously the sheer heat of it puts it well up there with far more explicit things I've read (and obviously I mean that in the best possible way :)).
There's so much I love about this but I think, most of all, I love all that unspoken tension. At no point, as far as I recall, do they so much as hint at what's going on between them, it's all just left to stand, and yet there's so much there under the surface.
Poor Skandar! He has it so bad, and yet he's just too - what?, shy?, intimidated?, immature?, clueless?, all of the above and more? - to know it, and he certainly can't talk about it. I really hope Tilda actually puts him out of this misery at some point and tells him, one way or the other, because that last paragraph is rather heart-breaking.
But before the last paragraph! Again, the uncertainty of it, the silence, Skandar's battle between anger and possessiveness - wanting to make Tilda come just to show that he can - and love and affection. And obviously, the image of this apparently utterly controlled woman just breaking under his tongue. Just hnnnng! Hot :p
You show the complexity of their relationship so well, too, well, how it is in Skandar's head, anyway. His boyish crush on her, his realisation that she probably only sees him as a child, and then the development of his feelings into other far more complicated things. Wonderful!
Oh, and the hilarious inadequacy of Skandar's excuse! You can just see the cogs in the woman at the door's mind going, making connections that she knows can't possibly be true (can they?), balanced only by the weakest excuse imaginable. Heee :) Let's hope she's not a gossip :D
As always, so much to enjoy here, and I just wish I could give it a comment that does it justice!
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