Okay, I'm totally writing this comment as I read it.
the start of a chorus that never ends.
OKAY YOU'VE ALREADY KILLED ME WITH A LINE. I love that, god, what a gorgeous line. AAAAH.
Oh God I love how you write Joe and his knowing wink and the music constantly on his lips. I have such a hard time writing Joe cause I'm basically his opposite but you've got him so perfectly in such a simple moment, his singing and humming the song. I LOVE YOUR JOE SO MUCH.
Joe plucked one of the headphone buds out of his ear and put it in his own, leaning in and listening
Oh God, that made me weak in the knees. You got it so perfectly in such a simple way (I keep saying simple BUT NOT IN A BAD WAY you keep writing things without deocration, so easily and naturally where I get all tangled in sickly language and metaphor and you just make everything sound so perfect and real and vibrant and there) I love how Joe just takes Nick's space, how you showed how close they are in such an uncomplicated scene. So so gorgeous
Oh GOD and the way they rehearse the ALBL/So Far Away mash-up in their BUNKS together still wired and sleepless and Jesus Christ what an image to have, what a perfect illustration of THEM. I can see it, so perfectly, the way you write is so image-filled and vivid without (like I said before) being flowery and distracting. You make these pictures so clear and clean and GOD I'm jealous of you hahaha
And oh man the sleeping together and Kevin waking then up and I can SEE it so well, the quiet understanding, knowing his brothers have SOMETHING he can't understand.
The bit with Nick imagining his life outside of, well, Disney let's be honest. GOD. I can feel the longing. How do you do that? Make emotions so visible through narration? You make everything so easy to connect to, every line is just so full of emotion I DON'T GET IT. I don't often get this way with authors but YOU, you somehow make this so heavy, so full of emotional gravity. The way Nick berates himself for longing for more when he has his band, it hurts and it makes sense and I feel for him. YOU ARE AMAZING CAN I SAY THAT AGAIN. Cause holy hell OW MY HEART.
Also, the trope of Joe sharing headphones with Nick? Pretty much killing me everytime. What a perfect image for them, one headphone each.
He's only ever admitted it to Joe, and even then not in so many words
THIS. THIS IS THEM SO PERFECTLY. The way they know, and it doesn't take words for Joe to know what Nick means AND I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN WHEN YOU SAY IT'S HARD TO WRITE THEM you have captured them so pefectly.
And then he remembers that it's just him and his brother and it's one of those rare occasions when he can say what he likes
I'M TRYING TO BE ELOQUENT AND SAY WHAT I FEEL BUT OH MY GOD THAT JUST KILLED ME. I CAN'T EVEN EXPRESS IT. The... oh god the longing and the knowing and YOU'VE WRITTEN THEM SO PERFECTLY YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW. The intimacy by necessity and the clinging to each other in a world that's spinning so fast and this is just so... perfectly what they are.
(Okay now you're making me feel really bad for not really liking the Kings of Leon. I like "Sex on Fire" but I didn't dig the rest of the album. GUILT!)
he wants to sing Gravity the way it was written, not omitting 'hell' for 'heck'
Oh man, I was listening to "Gravity" (the John Mayer Trio version) on repeat through this fic and I was thinking the exact same thing, almost mentally begging the Jonas Brothers to write music like that cause obviously they've got the talent, the means to make something deep and affecting, clearly they like music like that, but I feel like they're trapped in this Disney sensability. Ahhhhh :(
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HOLY GODDAMN SHIT FINALLY :D :D :D
Date: 2009-04-16 03:11 am (UTC)the start of a chorus that never ends.
OKAY YOU'VE ALREADY KILLED ME WITH A LINE. I love that, god, what a gorgeous line. AAAAH.
Oh God I love how you write Joe and his knowing wink and the music constantly on his lips. I have such a hard time writing Joe cause I'm basically his opposite but you've got him so perfectly in such a simple moment, his singing and humming the song. I LOVE YOUR JOE SO MUCH.
Joe plucked one of the headphone buds out of his ear and put it in his own, leaning in and listening
Oh God, that made me weak in the knees. You got it so perfectly in such a simple way (I keep saying simple BUT NOT IN A BAD WAY you keep writing things without deocration, so easily and naturally where I get all tangled in sickly language and metaphor and you just make everything sound so perfect and real and vibrant and there) I love how Joe just takes Nick's space, how you showed how close they are in such an uncomplicated scene. So so gorgeous
Oh GOD and the way they rehearse the ALBL/So Far Away mash-up in their BUNKS together still wired and sleepless and Jesus Christ what an image to have, what a perfect illustration of THEM. I can see it, so perfectly, the way you write is so image-filled and vivid without (like I said before) being flowery and distracting. You make these pictures so clear and clean and GOD I'm jealous of you hahaha
And oh man the sleeping together and Kevin waking then up and I can SEE it so well, the quiet understanding, knowing his brothers have SOMETHING he can't understand.
The bit with Nick imagining his life outside of, well, Disney let's be honest. GOD. I can feel the longing. How do you do that? Make emotions so visible through narration? You make everything so easy to connect to, every line is just so full of emotion I DON'T GET IT. I don't often get this way with authors but YOU, you somehow make this so heavy, so full of emotional gravity. The way Nick berates himself for longing for more when he has his band, it hurts and it makes sense and I feel for him. YOU ARE AMAZING CAN I SAY THAT AGAIN. Cause holy hell OW MY HEART.
Also, the trope of Joe sharing headphones with Nick? Pretty much killing me everytime. What a perfect image for them, one headphone each.
He's only ever admitted it to Joe, and even then not in so many words
THIS. THIS IS THEM SO PERFECTLY. The way they know, and it doesn't take words for Joe to know what Nick means AND I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN WHEN YOU SAY IT'S HARD TO WRITE THEM you have captured them so pefectly.
And then he remembers that it's just him and his brother and it's one of those rare occasions when he can say what he likes
I'M TRYING TO BE ELOQUENT AND SAY WHAT I FEEL BUT OH MY GOD THAT JUST KILLED ME. I CAN'T EVEN EXPRESS IT. The... oh god the longing and the knowing and YOU'VE WRITTEN THEM SO PERFECTLY YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW. The intimacy by necessity and the clinging to each other in a world that's spinning so fast and this is just so... perfectly what they are.
(Okay now you're making me feel really bad for not really liking the Kings of Leon. I like "Sex on Fire" but I didn't dig the rest of the album. GUILT!)
he wants to sing Gravity the way it was written, not omitting 'hell' for 'heck'
Oh man, I was listening to "Gravity" (the John Mayer Trio version) on repeat through this fic and I was thinking the exact same thing, almost mentally begging the Jonas Brothers to write music like that cause obviously they've got the talent, the means to make something deep and affecting, clearly they like music like that, but I feel like they're trapped in this Disney sensability. Ahhhhh :(